I'm going to fight

by firexdancer   Apr 5, 2007


I look into the mirror,
hoping what I see is fake,
The image is still there,
my body starts to shake.

what I see is a girl,
not just any girl I see,
the creature hiding in that mirror,
I'm afraid to say is me.

she crouches in it's depths,
torn skin rotting black,
blood pouring from her wrists,
yet still able to attack.

her open eyes so empty,
save the hatred that consumes them,
like a rose, now petals torn,
the thorns still on the stem.

she sees me so clearly,
as she beckons with her finger,
I know she needs me,
because there's nothing else I can bring her.

I know that if I touched her,
I would never again cry,
never feel this pain,
I would die.

but I know that I am stronger,
I'm sorry, but tonight,
I'm not going to give up to myself,
I'm going to fight.

I hope you like it!!!

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  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    It is very original and deep, few lines really touched me. I don't like the last stanza too much but the rest of it is great, really beautiful... Metaphors are also excellent in this poem.

  • 17 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    Nice poem! I really like it! well penned!

    "I�m sorry, but tonight,
    I�m not going to give up to myself,
    I�m going to fight."

    Just edit it :P to remove the weird symbols :)

    TC :)

  • 17 years ago

    by skynerraw

    What I see is a girl,
    not just any girl I see,
    the creature hiding in that mirror,
    I'm afraid to say is me.

    Wow this is wonderful! Really well worded, and it flows smooth, it created an image in my mind as I read it, keep up the great writing!
    Sky

  • 17 years ago

    by Tricky Daze

    That poem was so deep and sorrowful and i always like that image of mirror in poems

    what I see is a girl,
    not just any girl I see,
    the creature hiding in that mirror,
    I'm afraid to say is me.

    Take care
    Good job

  • 17 years ago

    by .K.i.T.t.Y.

    I liked this poem as well. Things flowed pretty nicely, and the structure was good. The imagery you created was vivid in my mind, creepy picture. I liked the ending. I liked how you showed a strong person, how she's above this influence.
    now the stuff you should fix would be:
    "what I see is a girl,
    not just any girl I see,"
    <<i don't like the repetition of the word see, it just didn't come out as strong as it couldve.

    secondly, i saw some places that punctuation needed editing. however, that is up to you.

    nice job. =]

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