Orphan Child

by Mezmeryz   Apr 11, 2007


She lies down gently on the bed,
Hugging her knees and resting her head.
Her mother's gone; they told her she's dead,
And when she was young, her father had left.
What is this place she is told to call home,
Where she feels cold and forever alone?
When she does wrong, like smile at what she had,
Times she spent happy with mum and dad,
She is made to suffer by her carer, with a slap on the face;
Shouted down on, till she feels a disgrace.

Her surroundings confuse her, this language of hate,
But she keeps faith in God, and trusts her fate.
She feels she deserves it; it is part of her creed,
God is punishing her, because she has done a bad deed.
But sometimes she wonders what sin she has done,
To be kept isolated, hidden from everyone.
Is she so ugly? An abomination?
Or just hated; because she's an orphan?
She never has wanted to depend on another,
But what can she do? She no longer has a mother.

Helpless and lonely in this bleak, cold world,
Dried tears on her cheeks can't tell her story untold.
So many thoughts run through an orphan child's mind,
All they require is to not be confined;
Some love from mankind.

*please rate or comment on the poem, it will be greatly appreciated and i will comment and rate back all round. Thank- you.

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  • 16 years ago

    by tyanna

    There was so much emtion in this poem!! So very sad..
    However, the first stanza started out great but toward the end you was off on the flow. The same goes with the second stanza. The message was very clear though. This poem really painted an image in my mind..Great job 5/5
    Tyanna

  • 17 years ago

    by Choose xX Alex Xx Life

    So sad but so true.
    if tony blaire read this he would soon help the poor and needful. :D

    xxx alex xxx

  • 17 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    "She is corrected by her carer" I wasnt really sure what that was supposed to mean so it kinda threw me off the poem. I really liked the message of this poem it was beautiful the only thing I didnt like to much was the rhyme scheme sometime it rhymed sometimes it didnt some times it rhymed differently, it kind of made it look like you hade 3 different styles in one. And as powerful as the last line was I think that it needs to be a little bit longer in order for it to flow better with the poem as a whole. I really liked the metaphores in this one nice work. just a few things to work on but other than that it was really good.

  • 17 years ago

    by lostlllsoul

    Mez girl!! i loved it!
    keep writting alright=)

  • 17 years ago

    by ~*SugarCube*~

    Amazing poem. Very touching. You did a great job in writing it. Keep up the good work!!

    ~Chelsea