Lines of Pain (revised)

U have really good description! i think this is one of my favorite pomes iv read on this site! I luv it! <3

This is really good. the rhythem is good too! i can relate to this. 5/5

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I've gone through the same thing
I think you handled this very maturely
I dont think you do it or did do it for attention
Like a lot of losers I know
I really enjoy reading your work
I am adding you to my favorites!

Oh wow this was sad:[ but you did a great job writing it! it sounded like song lyrics in a way which i liked. 5/5

I love this poem.
But it's just out there.
It's simple
Tells a story but it's not a story itself.
Although
This part didn't flow as well as the rest
Strawberry gashes stain my pale skin
Each red line tells a story, a deep dark tale
Looking at my wrists, you can see into my soul
I know each cut, down to every detail
It was a bit rocky.
Otherwise 5/5?