The point of braking......

by cowgirlstar26   Apr 28, 2007


This is really off for what I normally write, it was a blog for my facebook but I dunno its different so I thought I would post it here

The point of braking......

eyes heavy...she can no longer sleep
muscles ache.... as she has giving up everything
heart pounds...longing for that one glimpse of love
feeling nothing.... how far is enough?

bones broken....from each time she has fallen
scars bleed..... thus every unkind word spoken
color fading.... like her life its leaving
tears fall...... another night she's crying

screaming ceases....no one will hear her anyways
body trembles..... shes too tired to brake
heart stops.... this is her point of braking
life ends..... and they thought she was faking

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  • 16 years ago

    by ILoveRobbie

    I like this poem it's really good.

  • Creative Format...Well-Worded...This Was Really Good Hun! 5.5
    xoxo-Nikki-xoxo

  • 16 years ago

    by carissalynn

    Oh wow, that is relee sad, i like how you formatted it, very nice. I liked these lines, so powerful:
    screaming ceases....no one will hear her anyways
    body trembles..... shes too tired to brake
    LOVE ITT!!!
    Carissa

  • 16 years ago

    by MaSkEdSoUl

    Oh wow, that was really good. I expecially loved the ending, dont know why. On this line take the 's' away from time:

    "bones broken....from each times she has fallen"

    Thats all I got. Great choice of words. Keep writing! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Beautiful poem!.....great flow..it's filled with sadness..yet so beautiful