Things Change

by Sara   Apr 29, 2007


Seeing her with you has been hard enough
Watching you two fall faster into love
I'm trying to keep strong, but it is tough
To watch the one I love soar high above

You walk past and you do not look at me
I am trying to remember the past
When you promised you would make me happy
We were like normal teens falling too fast

Now I see that you are happy with her
She puts a big smile on your cute face
She can make your whole stomach start to stir
I cannot believe I have been replaced

I have moved on from those wonderful eyes
I am so sick of you telling me lies

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  • 16 years ago

    by Chelsea

    I know exactly how you feel with this poem. it was a great poem with great flow. you are an amazing writer and keep the good work up. thanks for the comment.
    chels.

  • 17 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Hey.beautiful peice..loved it!....kp writing..
    Tk care.
    xx Pooja xx

  • 17 years ago

    by Sara

    ^ just to add, thanks for the critique, but yes this is a sonnet, which was written for my english class haha

  • 17 years ago

    by Momentary Relapse

    You have some overused words. The flow sometimes felt choppy and forced. Is it in a sonnet form? It could explain the flow prob and the word choice.
    "You walk past and you do not look at me
    I am trying to remember the past"
    These lines feel...wooden, I guess. It needs something more to it... Of course the little story-ish thing this piece has is actually cool.
    ~Faith-less

  • 17 years ago

    by Molly

    Good job! 5/5 for me! keep up the good work.

    -Molly

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