Our Song

by aDORKable x3   Apr 30, 2007


I deleted you of my phone; I didn't know what else to do.
I couldn't stand the lies and everything you put me through.
All the letters have been thrown away because you couldn't care less.
Just go away, leave me alone, I can deal with this mess.

The heartache will go away; the tear drops, they will fade-
I'll burn the pictures on the wall as with the memories made.
No longer do I need your love to hold me strong;
Because everything is right now and you are just wrong.

The pillow no longer holds the makeup the tears washed away-
No longer does my calendar mark our special day.
Everything is fine now, I'm moving on alone.
You were always trouble; I guess I should've known.

I only have one down fall, it's sad, some may say.
I can't help if because it's with me everyday.
It's the one thing keepng me holding out so long-
Baby, it's the lyrics and the melody of Our Song.

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Our Song ; By: Ciao - I loved this, reminded me at a few parts of the song Leave the Pieces by The Wreckers, and at other parts of the song Picture To Burn by Taylor Swift lol. Anyways, the imagery and word choice in this poem was spot on, I really enjoyed reading it.
SPELLING - 2/3
GRAMMAR - 4/5
CONTENT - 4.5/5
FLOW - 4/5
FOLLOWED RULES - 2/2
TOTAL - 16.5/20

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  • 13 years ago

    by TheWorldFellNUWerentThere

    I justed loved this poem. I think it's one of my favorite poems. Thanks for entering the contest. And I hope you join some more 5/5

  • 13 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    Congratulations on coming first in my contest.
    I'm not big fan of this style so I won't ahve much to say if all your poems are the same.
    4.5

  • 13 years ago

    by Mommy And Me

    This is a beautifully written poem. i really enjoyed listening to it. it as awsome. :) reminded me of another poem that you have written. </3

  • 13 years ago

    by xxSnow Angelxx

    Very beautiful poem..i loved the flow!...very well penned!
    Good job

  • 13 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    Ohhh this was so sad and yet written so beautifully at the same time.
    The opening stanza really pulled me into the poem, and from there on it just kept getting better and better.
    The flow was perfect in this.