You Might Be Able To Stay

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   May 21, 2007


You're perverse enough to make a move, but you'll never follow through,
You've got enough on your heart to bruise as if you were black and blue.
And the thermometer's falling to zero below; the windshield is freezing like Nitrogen,
But you'd rather fall into a sleep after sipping at a cup of your disgusting gin.

You lay there, expecting him to make the move; to pick up where your words left off,
But when he comes back from the bathroom, he's got nothing but a disease ridden cough.
You can feed yourself with his lies like a porridge you could eat every day;
You can get up to leave him or you might even be able to stay.

Call for the cow horn, you want this said loud and clear: you don't know what you want, and that's how it'll always be;
But, he doesn't like this; you must make your decision now: "It's either or her or me."

You're perverse enough to make a move, but you'll never follow through,
You've got enough on your heart to bruise as if you were black and blue.
You can feed yourself with his lies like a porridge you could eat every day;
You can get up to leave him or you might even be able to stay.

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  • 16 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    HOW IN THE DEVIL WAS THIS A 4.5?! That angers me, lol. I thought this was amazing, clearly some jealous readers disagree with me..obviously I'm jealous of your writing talents too, but I don't downvote because of it, lol. I loved this Darling, don't let that rating get you down, let it flatter you instead. :]

    5.5
    <3

  • 16 years ago

    by aDORKable x3

    You have a great style to your poetry. I love the way you take two lines from two different stanzas and then bring them together at the end. This one was great! As soon as I am done commenting, I am adding you to my favorites! I already added on of your poems to my favorites!Great job! :]

  • 16 years ago

    by Startle Me

    The second line on your first stanza really didn't make sense to me.
    Lol.
    Nitrogen and gin doesn't really rhyme that well.
    But how you put it in a stanza, it makes them seem like a perfect couple.
    Second stanza?
    I can see the image clearly in my head.
    Guy walking out the bathroom coughing
    And girl doubting his lies.
    But, he doesn't like this; you must make your decision now: "It's either or her or me."
    Her or me?
    Who is "her" exactly?
    Is the man having an affair?
    This was kind of confusing to me.
    You didn't really explain all that much.
    I don't know.
    4/5?