Reopening the wounds

by Marie   May 29, 2007


I thought the first time i said goodbye was torture
but it seems each time it gets worse
teasing myself with thoughts of seeing you
seems to be my curse

while i'm talking to you I feel healed
but then we have to part and the cut comes back
how many times I've wanted to cry
I just cannot keep track

would it have been easier if it had all been final
if we had never talked again?
What if it had been our last goodbye
what would happen then?

would i still crave you as much as i do?
would you still be on my mind?
would i still love you the way i do?
would there be any remorse to find?

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  • 16 years ago

    by Corruption

    Fantastic poem you did a great job and thanks for the comment

    keenan

  • 16 years ago

    by Debbie

    Apparently, this isn't one of your best works, considering its unnatural flow and forced lines. However, if I may suggest, perhaps applying a consistent metre or a certain syllable count (say 8, 10, or 12+ syllables) in every line will--in my humblest opinion--augment this poem to a higher degree for the most part.

    Other than that, I can personally correlate with this piece. The "What-If's" and "If Only's" statements certainly tugged a chord with me. If only one could turn back time and change things for the betterment of everyone, but will it ever be better though if we were given the power to change the past? This, I wonder...
    Nicely penned, nonetheless. xD

    -Debbie Cakes

  • 16 years ago

    by Marc Ortiz

    A great poem. flow was okay for me. just a suggestion to use more powerful words. I know you can do it because you're a good poet! keep up the good work :)

  • 16 years ago

    by robin milford

    Good pem i liked this one

  • 16 years ago

    by Anonymous Angel

    Hey,
    A nice poem, I love the first two stanza's, good work 5/5
    kisses stephanie

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