What I Miss About Heaven {Trijan Refrain}

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   Jun 2, 2007


About the devil saying he misses Heaven, then realizes he preferred to betray and loves the little games he plays with humans.
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The stars have forgotten my name,
And I'm the one to blame;
"I don't miss Heaven!" I've proclaimed;
I hang my head in shame.
I miss Heaven every day,
Yet it is my fault that I strayed.
....I miss Heaven.
....I miss Heaven.
And I regret it every day.

The stars have forgotten my name,
There's no one else to blame;
I hide within the ember flames;
Look at what I've became.
I look at hope and pray the stars;
When I strayed I went way too far.
....I look at hope.
....I look at hope.
When I strayed I went way too far.

The stars have forgotten my name,
And I once cried with shame;
But I look deep within the flames;
I like these little games.
You can't stop me -- my evil ways,
I'll get you, my pretty, one day.
....You can't stop me.
....You can't stop me.
I miss Heaven but choose Betray.
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Rhyme scheme: a/b/a/b/c/c/d,d refrain of first 4 words of line five /c

Meter: 8/6/8/6/8/8/4,4 refrain/8

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  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    What I really like about reading each one of your poems is how unique the topics seem to be. I would never have come up with an idea to write about something like the devil missing heaven it's just so different but in a really amazing way. I really liked this poetry form i've seen it many times before although I don't think any have compared to this piece. You write into such a great depth and explore different areas which is highly noticed throughout each poem of yours. Well done, Sheena. ~Mel

  • 16 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    I think that you did a beautiful job with this one because when you wrote I really got the impression that the devil missed the place but at the same time he didn't regret anything that he did. And its very hard to combine those two different thoughts into one peice of writing. Nice job. The only that that I can critique on is take another look at the syliable count you are a little off in some places. But other than that nice job.

  • 16 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    WHY WAS THIS A 4.5!?

    Man, didn't understand that before I read it; definately don't understand it after reading it. This poem is amazing, it holds so much in it. I want to try writing one of these. :[ Lol. Good job, Darling.

    5.5
    :]
    <3

  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    Loved it. :]
    I bet that's how he really feels, eh. I love reading Trijan Refrain's, but I can't write them too well. I love how they're put together and such. Especially how you did it. :]

    Keep it up.

  • 16 years ago

    by DepthofPassion

    This is very creative...I love it..You are a magnificent writer...
    5/5
    love Brit

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