Good job hun. I think you did a really good job. The flow of it was excellent. Nice job on the rhyming. Keep it up. =]

You are a very talented poet that writes from the heart in a cultural colloquial style
and I enjoyed reading this.

Wow! this was really good. i loved it! you are an awesome writer. 5/5

xo kisses xo

Very creative, you use very clever words and you went with an acrostic poem which it is always good for a little change. You had a good flow that was carried from beginning to end keeping its durability. The words you choose were clever as I said before and they were well chosen to fit the story you were telling. You followed the double acrostic's rules and kept the poem still sounding good which it is important thus you were able to create a very well written piece. Well done Laura, superb poem and I hope to see more as superiorly written as this piece of work.

Peace, Poetry & Power,

Nick

It was a really nice acrostic. I liked how it flowed and the message you tr to show. Good job. 5/5

I loved this poem alot. I found it to be creative and interesting. I particulary love this style it is one of my favorites, and for you to do a double shows how well you truely write. Your word choice is amazing, strong, powerful and emotion which you portrayed throughout this entire poem beautifully. This poem sounded great the flow was truely flawless I didnt find it to go off track at all. Well done on this I have found you to be quite talented just by reading one of your poems. 5/5 definitly ~mel

Great tribute to him, and well use of a certain technique. well done.

5/5 David

Great vocabulary and because of your well thought out use of enjambament the lines seemed to flow well into each other, something i find is rare in acrostics.

i liked your word choice and thought you stuck to the structure amazingly well.

great read.
xx

On a second read, i realised a few mistakes in the structure, the 5th line ends in d instead of e.

the 14th and 12th line also end in the wrong letter.
xxx

I didn't really like the last line. It takes the cuteness of the poem away and makes it more sexual. The rest was great. 4/5

Laura sweetie this is superb. Morethan adhering to the acrostic rule you have managed to keep a flawless flow in it. Sweetie your poem is outstanding with great lexical power and unique style. Tc

With love
Fsams

It's cute, and sad, I guess. And, well thought out. I wonder if I can give you one suggestion...

The O in SOUL, should be, I think, a 'Oh,' instead of 'Or.'

Besides that it's a great poem, I always have trouble with acrostics, and you seem to have nailed it.

Really,
I
Give it
Half
Ten

Out of half Ten! Wooh!
Nicely done!... How was that? xD lol
!
Yours truly,
~Richi~

This is a deep fantabulous poem!!! I am so gonna add this to my favs. I loved it from the 1st wrd!!!

Nice

I loved this acrostic.
I loved all the words,
they fit perfectly in my thoughts.
5/5
Take care, love.

-Heather

As acrostics go they can be very testing and strainging to use words that really would love to!

anyway 4.5 i thought this was very good keep it up :)

Great choice of words, I personally don't write acrostic poems, but I know how hard it may be to write a acrostic piece good as this one.
Keep up! 5/5

Yet again very good word choice and its very creative..a 5/5

Your wording is once again great. Cant get enough of it! : ]]

I love the simple acrostic style. There's not much to say but keep up the good work. You're a great romantic poet.