Just a feeling

by lish   Jun 30, 2007


I'm not sure if i should tell you
just how much i love you so
cause I'm really just afraid
that you wont care and go

but last night i faced my fears
and confessed my love for you
you reaction was unsuspected
as you said you already knew

i thought I'd gotten over you
but obviously i haven't
i thought we'd become friends
but we've become more distant

u said it wouldn't be weird
but i guarantee it will
i bet that from this very day
everything will start to go downhill

i shouldn't have told you
i felt it in my heart
so now and forever on
i wont be your sweetheart

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  • 16 years ago

    by MaSkEdSoUl

    Wow very well written. The flow and rhythm was excellent. On the second stanza last line I think you should put 'knew' to know and capitalize all your I's lol something small. But overall I love it very good at expressing what you feel. Keep it up!

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    This one sounds so sincere, and it is written nicely, with a lot of emotions. You created good atmosphere in it, but you could use some metaphors( that's just my suggestion) for some of your emotions.

  • 16 years ago

    by Michelle18

    This poem was good...but its not your best... you were putting past tense with present tense and it just threw the flow off... but overall it was just an okay poem..4/5 on this one.

  • 16 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Just express what all what u feels,, and later on u may feel better.. so dont afraid to express it, well great expressing ur feelings in this poet,, u wrote it very well and it has a great flow.. 5/5

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