Pity Theft.

by lish   Jan 8, 2008


The feeling of helplessness
overwhelms my soul
It scavengers through my body
until it makes a hole.

It tears through my heart
until theres nothing left
I lay there on the floor
overwhelmed with pity theft

I feel as if I'm alone
but theres people all around
I cry out for help
but no-one makes a sound

Why did I even try
I knew they didn't care
How could i be so stupid,
now my heart shall forever remain bare.

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  • 17 years ago

    by xxTaegan Emilyxx

    This one is heaps good.

    "I lay there on the floor
    overwhelmed with pity theft"

    these were my favourite lines.
    The imagery was great and it was very emotional.
    xx
    Taegan Emily

  • 17 years ago

    by SH3S fiNAllY H3R3 l0V3 U N3NA

    This poem was great. The emotion in this felt very realistic and the flow fit just perfect.

    "It tears through my heart
    until theres nothing left
    I lay there on the floor
    overwhelmed with pity theft"

    ^ This was my fav stanza from the poem. Great job. 5/5

    .:CiNdY:.

  • 17 years ago

    by Ashleigh

    Loved the poem! theres a lot of feeling in it and i can relate to it so well as can so many other people. 5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by FlawlesslyTarnished

    Beautiful poem. a very nice piece. and very
    relateable for me. I loved your choice of
    words. And i feel this same exact way every
    day of my life. a poem simply too amazing
    to use words to describe. :] great write. 5/5.

  • 17 years ago

    by isabel

    The feeling of helplessness is something i can relate to a lot...
    and you portraited this feeling wonderfully...
    the emotion in this piece takes my heart...
    this is an amazing poem =)
    *keep up*
    isabel

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