Sacred Silence.

by Teria   Jul 3, 2007


Sacred Silence.

Upon the grass of the blood stained hill
lies a child so deathly ill.
Her mind plays tricks through out each day,
as her soul finds sorrow from yesterday.
Her body is numb, silencing all earth
that's taking this child for less than she's worth.
A home so barren, broken and cold..
A sacred place to live for the brave and the bold.
Homeless and fearless.. this child does lie,
upon the bed of which the rest shall die.
Her pointless life is left for another,
to find herself in wondrous smother.
Of which was caused from a wounded heart,
that promised itself not to fall apart.
Perhaps the beauty has gone astray,
broken the curse of this very day.
For the child once lost has found a home..
in the ground below and more alone.

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  • 18 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    To find herself in wondrous smother.
    [[I don't like the line.]]

    Anyways.
    I like this, but I didn't. It didn't drag me in. Maybe it's, again, because I didn't feel the emotion in it. To me, that's important.
    I liked the story you were telling, but it just didn't grab me.
    And for some reason all the .... bother me. Maybe that's only me though.
    Sorry, Teria.

    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 4.5

  • 18 years ago

    by shatteredsoul

    Wow, what a happy ending lol!
    exististance without meaning
    is hardly an existance at all isnt it?

  • 18 years ago

    by my name is Llama

    Ohh this is so sad. i have to agree with one of the commenters above me. the final lines were simply beautiful. well done. xoxo

  • 18 years ago

    by Fsams

    Beautiful with nice rhymes, the flow is just flawless with overflowing meanings. I really liked your style of writing. Keep it up
    5/5 all the way
    Tc

  • 18 years ago

    by Stephanie Naylor

    WOW, that was a very very good poem
    i loved how you made it rhyme, because
    all the rhyming fit
    it never seemed forced
    and it also flowed well
    and i just loved the concept
    and

    "For the child once lost has found a home..
    in the ground below and more alone. "

    favorite stanza ^^

    particualy because its the ending and it really
    tied everything together

    5/5

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