by Bradley Peter Jul 3, 2007
category :
Life, society /
other
Try seeing it from my side |
by MyEscape
It's interesting how you compare love to a war almost in a literal sense, made especially more real by your last line. It's like all the words and fights were literal bruises and scars. It's an interesting take on the whole experience. Good job! |
by Jenni Marie
This was beautifully written. the emotion and depth in this piece are easy for the reader to see, while the imagery created painted very vivid pictures in my mind. the flow was perfect throughout the entire piece. the only thing i didn't like was the use of so many I's. but apart from that, this is beautiful. |
by *Charisma*
Pretty nice piece overall. I really loved your opening lines... |