LONLEY

by Stephanie Naylor   Jul 4, 2007


I sit here
theres nothing around

everything is dull
i don't here a sound

I feel like
no ones watching me

i don't see how
how this could this be

all my life theres
been someone watching my every move

i always felt
like i had something to prove

but now i can be free
and not have to please

i can sit outside for once
and my hair be ruffled by the breeze

i don't have to care about
what others think

under all that stress
i felt like I'd sink

but now you are all
away and gone

i can finally journey alone
in the river like a peaceful lonely swan

______________________________________________I wrote this poem today on the 4th of july for a contest

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  • 18 years ago

    by crystaljean88

    I liked this poem alot. i feel the same way.. i think u should make the poem more put together with the stanzas tho.. n not draged out so much cause it would look better. but besides that great poem. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Catastrophic Beauty

    Good poem. I loved the structure. I think the flow was a bit shaky but it got better towards the end. The rhyming was good though and I liked your choice of words in this poem. I also think you should capitalize your "I's". 5/5

    -Shannon <3

  • 18 years ago

    by Riley

    Excellent. That's pretty much all I can say lol, just very good.
    5/5
    Love the rhymes

  • 18 years ago

    by Ashley Apparatus

    Hmmm...

    The simplicity makes it interesting,
    But.. it starts out one way and turned in the middle...

    Which made it even more interesting.

    I'd givei t a 5.0/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Tara Kay

    This flowed very well, i thought it was beautiful. It was sad and powerful, full of emotion. i loved every line, i also loved the structure of the poem
    keep writing
    love Tara-Kay
    x

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