One of these days

by crystaljean88   Jul 13, 2007


You look so good,
and your eyes make me have butterflies.
whats the reason this is happenin,
i think together we should live our lives.

you always had the key,
the one precious thing to my heart.
i would do anything,
for us to have a fresh start.

i need to change my ways,
just like u said.
but whats the reason for that,
if we cant even share the same bed.

you said we dont have trust,
even though i know we do.
just give me this chance,
so i can i show my love for you.

i will be your queen,
and also your slave.
i will do whatever you say,
our relationship we need to save.

i told you how i felt,
while i put my heart on the line.
im risking my dignity,
just so one of these days i hope you can be mine.

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  • 16 years ago

    by skynerraw

    You write whats in your heart, and thats what makes your poems so good, it flows well, and the emotion really comes through, really well!

  • 16 years ago

    by The Queen of Spades

    A good poem, I particularly loved the lines "I will be your queen and also your slave" It shows an interesting contradiction of a relationship. Good work!

  • 16 years ago

    by Jenna

    Your emotions where strong but i really dont think you should space out the lines its difficult to read. other than that it was very good! keep it up!

    MickeysBabyGurl

  • 16 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    That is just so sweet

  • 16 years ago

    by Michelle18

    This poem is good..but i really think you shouldnt space out the lines...it really makes the poem hard to read....my suggestion would be to put it into stanzas...it would be an easier read.

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