Hard As Nails.

by Teria   Jul 18, 2007


When all else fails and dreams fall apart,
hold onto my love; hard as nails.
Break the skin, look beneath,
your only friend, is myself and I.
Caring too much, for useless things,
and, oh your touch breaks me down.
Tearing my life in two, but I couldn't dare,
fall out of love with you, you're the one - -
So, when all else fails and dreams fall apart,
hold onto my love; hard as nails.

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It does rhyme, btw. Most are internal [[within two lines each]]

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  • 16 years ago

    by Marie

    Hmm... the rhyming scheme made it hard to follow but the point was still made.. i liked the wording a lot. overall 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Hope

    The poem was fairly written, Umm I felt as though something was missing from it. Probably it was your choice of words, try rephrasing some of the lines and it will be much better.. Though it was not the best.. I should point out that I enjoyed your use of simile...'Hard as Nails' work on it, I see great potential in it..
    ~Hope~

  • 16 years ago

    by Michelle18

    This poem is okay...its not really the type of poem that i like to read...to be honest, it didnt have quite enough information to draw my attention towards the poem....its not the worse poem but its also not the best....overall i would give you a 4/5.....

    maybe add onto your poem or change some of the wording around and it could be better..

  • 16 years ago

    by Kirsty palmer

    I really enjoyed this poem, your rhyming scheme was different, which made it pleasure to read from the usual aabb or abab rhyming schemes. It was a heartfelt peice that was a joy to read. I think that the length was just the right size, though it was good, if it was too long i think the uniquness would have shortened!
    but i really enjoyed this poem because i could relate, and it was not the typical love poem that you get normally.
    xXx

  • 16 years ago

    by Mr M

    Very good statement...