Rainbow fades away

by ECILA ice   Jul 22, 2007


She had witness
As the rainbow fade from the sky
It happened so quickly
It didn't even say goodbye

She could still recall
The moment it suddenly came
How it made a difference
To a world that seems to be the same

Sky was so plain back then
With the sun after the rain
It happened to be normal for her
Until it came and break the sky from being plain

Rainbow put back the life
A breathless beauty she had never seen
Colors are so captivating, alluring
Hold a promising exquisiteness, a perfect scene

But like any other
It doesn't stay that long
Well this happened to be life
Forever always seems to be so wrong

**loving him makes the difference in her life but the guy who taught her to love so much left her.. that's the tragic story..

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  • 16 years ago

    by CODACHROME

    I love the wording in this but I feel you tried to hard to rhyme at times. this poem was still a good poem 4/5

    She could still recall
    The moment it suddenly came
    How it made a difference
    To a world that seems to be the same

    my favorite stanza I dont know why I just like it keep writing

  • 16 years ago

    by tears i cry

    It lacked a bit of flow i found it hard to keep concentrated some of you lines need repairing in this one mainly the bottom ones that will make the flow sound better 4/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Intoxic8dBeautyxXHaNaXx

    Ahh yes, another one of those poems. I liked it very much and I kind of got confused with the first two lines, maybe you should fix that. But anyway, it was great. Well done.

  • 16 years ago

    by Miu

    Beautiful! REally blew me away. I loved how you portryed that guy as a rainbow. And ending was simply perfect!
    Idea was amazing and really interesting.Could do a bit more emotion.
    Overall, loved it! :) 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    Now, To me this wasn't as good as the lyrics I read, But it was still an enjoyable read. Overall I liked the meaning you portrayed but this piece just didn't hit my heart for some reason. I have no idea why but I just couldn't feel alot of emotion coming from it. Still worth 5/5 from me though so well done.~mel

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