What Her Father Has Done (Triolet)

by TwiztidJuggalette   Aug 18, 2007


She sat there bleeding in so much pain,
Because of what her father had done.
He beat her so badly, each and every night.
She sat there bleeding in so much pain,
He'll never understand the impact he has left on her life.
There was no one for her to tell, for he has won.
She sat there bleeding in so much pain,
Because of what her father had done...

First Triolet...Can you please Tell me what you think...

Triolet is a type of poem that consists of 8 lines and its rhyming is ABaAabAB..

The first line are the same as in line four and line seven. And The second and eight line are the same...

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  • 16 years ago

    by nikki

    This one was so sad. i can't believe this was your fist try at this type of poetry. you did it so well. i loved it. great work, wanna teach me how to write one. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Somber Esprit

    So sad... really well written... and so sad. :( the emotions are strong and the imagery is good.

  • 16 years ago

    by Sherry Lynn

    This is sad and heart wrenching. The scenery you displayed here actually leads the imagination and that is a good thing.

    You have written this poem in such away that the images actually implant themselves n the readers mind.

    --Sher

  • 16 years ago

    by Adelle

    A deep sad heart felt poem you have a lot of talent you did a really good job on this one. 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Wallace

    I love triolets, they're my favorite style. And i think you did wonderful with this. The starting sounded off but at the ending it really came into play, excellent job. Great work. It's been a pleasurable read.

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