Monster In My Home

by MakeBelieveLove   Sep 4, 2007


There's A Monster In My Home
I Feel As Though I Can't Be Alone
Se He Doesn't Have To Do Anything
Him Being Here, Falls Into My Darkest Dreams
This Monster In My Home
And I'm Left Her All Alone
With No One To Help
I've Already Been Broke
But Never In My Home
See He Has His Eyes on Me Like I'm a Prized Stone
Can't Someone Help Me.
The Only Thing Is No One Can See
What This Monster Is Doing To Me.
The Looks and Touch Frightens Me
He Just Wont Let Me Be....
Please Someone Help Me
Before This Monster Really Gets To Me
There's A Monster In My Home
And Here I am Left All Alone.

I know this poem has a lot of little kid aspects to it... but I think it is OK... Tell Me What you think

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  • 16 years ago

    by xXemoxXloveXx

    This is a great peom i totally injoyed reading it and i agree with it there is a monster in my home to

  • 16 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    I felt like the rymthes where forced, which made the flow choppy. I think if you, revise it, and try too make it flow a little more smoothly.. then it could be a more natural poem.
    I really liked the concept, and as Niclean said above, it would make a very interesting poem, and add more emotion, and possibly help the flow if you described the monster as a parent or something.
    Still A good Job,
    Keep it up,
    Elaine.

  • 16 years ago

    by aDORKable x3

    I could sense a hidden meaning behind this poem; maybe I am wrong. There was a few grammar errors, but nothing real serious. It was okay.
    4.5
    Ciao~

  • 16 years ago

    by TwiztidJuggalette

    It was good...A little creepy, but if you read it a few times you get the message..that you were trying to send...good job...

    5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Kris

    I really like it!!

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