The Crash

by MakeBelieveLove   Sep 10, 2007


Speeding
Crashing
Bleeding
Dreaming
Beginning
To Dream
Smiling
Touching
Feeling
Seeing
Holding
On to You
Slipping
Leaving
Crying
Ending
Trying
to Stay alive
Crying
Speeding
Crashing
Bleeding
Crying
Ending
Because of you

~~~~~~~Really Weird style, not sure if I like it. But Give Comments and Ratings
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MakeBelieveLove

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  • 16 years ago

    by Melpomene

    The poem was interesting but I do believe here:
    Dreaming
    Beginning
    To Dream
    Got repeative in the same place.
    The flow was alright but not very strong. The word choice was deep though I liked that, though wasn't so keen on the structure but still give you a well done on effort. Overall a 3/5 I'd have to say.

    ~Mel

  • 16 years ago

    by Catastrophic Beauty

    This was nice. But not great. I don't like the structure and style of this poem. It didn't flow very well but it seems like you were trying something new which is good. All in all though, I'd give this a 3/5.

    -Shannon <3

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