Losing the light

Sam
Congrats for this being one of the picks for featured writer of the week for R.T.V.W
Take Care
Cindy

When feelings of depression overcome us we are forced to deal with the pain of everything going wrong in our life. You have pinpointed depression and death in my opinion. Longing for the death to take you and free you from the depression.

This brought tears to my eyes. Very heartfelt.

Eyes losing sight,
life spiraling... losing the light.

These lines really cut to the heart.
Excellent job!
Take Care Cindy

Some nice imagery though I guess the repetition was effective I did not overly like it. But it did work for this piece. I like the line "Scorching night heat" as it uses night and heat...which can be seen as two contrasting forces. Overall the structure worked and the imagery was good.
~Faith-less

Your ability to write so well amazes me, your poem has so many levels.