Perfect, Yet Deadly Words

I like the context and the ideas. Not that this detracts from the poem, but i'm not sure about the flow and the rhyming. It's still a great piece though.
DnB

This poem, i just can't actually and clearly see the picture though i know it's another unique piece (the flow went off a bit). about the last stanza i can't find any problem in it 'coz you manage to end it somehow smoothly (or perhaps, not so smooth 'coz of the flow i'm telling you earlier) aside from the fact that i'm aniticipating for more powerful and graceful ending. the ending made me feel like you suddenly dropped the words so easily just to say you have wrapped it all up and end it that way (just let your feeling do the work and not merely with your mind). hope that works and sorry if i offended you.. =)

Excellent!

Ok, for this one, The first line rhymes so well but not as the same as other lines but its okay, and I notice that the lines were forced. Well I gave 5 for the realism of your piece. Nicely done!

Keep it up!

It kinda sacres me how much I can relate to this, so I just had to comment.
I loved the 'You paint the simile on my shocked face' line'.
Again a great poem with good exposed emotions.

"Pushing me into the deep end, I forgot to tell you I can't swim" ohh how i friggin loved those lines! they really stood out to me...filled with so much depth and meaning and just beautifully written...as was the whole poem...this my dear is my favourite of your's so far...perfect!