Fake god

by Veamm   Sep 17, 2007


Fake god

Worship a fake god
comply with trust
Obey his commands
The ordeal of lust

Disable authority
your points of view
Believe such things
and having no clue

Do imbalance acts
gain for his will
A foolish leader
so fake, so unreal

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  • 16 years ago

    by Jenna

    I like this...i believe the same as well.
    the words and flow were great. keep it up.

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    Incredible and very true poem. It has excellent atmosphere and you expressed your emotions greatly. Well done!

  • 16 years ago

    by ghosts in bloom

    The rhyme scheme was a little
    off in the last stanza, but it is still
    a slant rhyme! (I love those.) The
    reason it stands out is simply because
    the other ones weren't, making something
    seem off. Otherwise, well written concept.

    Take Care,
    Smiles,
    *N

  • 16 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    The rhyme scheme was alittle off in the last stanza, but besides that the flow was perfect. I reall enjoyed the concept and your point of view. Great read/write. 5/5

    marcella

  • 16 years ago

    by Kristina

    I actually really like this a lot, cause I dont' believe in god either. This poem was really good and I liked the rhyming. Nicely done! 5/5

    ~Kristina

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