Left behind

by Veamm   Sep 21, 2007


Left behind

Browse some posibility
I left myself behind
stuck in forbidden isle
hanging in constant sides

Spoiled foods and drinks
some depleted motivation
Remote controlled tiny ship
cast away for rejection

Hoping for some assistance
much striving to survive
Wanted to go back to reality
its too late, he's left behind

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  • 16 years ago

    by DeadandBleeding

    The imagery in this is so descriptive, i love it! You use language so well, this flows really well and i love the way you get so much across in so few words. Amazing.
    DnB

  • 16 years ago

    by Gasttlee

    "Hoping for some assistance
    much striving to survive
    Wanted to go back to reality
    its too late, he's left behind"

    Not sure why, but these lines touched me the most! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Wings Of Flames

    Im not quite sure what this is about please PM me and tell me. Your style is brilliant you have a well thought rhythm and well presented.
    5.5 (again)

  • 16 years ago

    by BeautifulDisaster

    I really like this poem. Not all of it makes sense to me though. Loved the style. But im really not that big of a fan of the short poems

  • 16 years ago

    by kIROS DELA VEGA

    Great penned dude... keep it up... well i went on your country last month... may kamag anak kac ako dyan... keep it up..