Bend Me, Break Me [Rispetto]

by Pete   Sep 26, 2007


I feel him pursuing me, he haunts every dream.
He's freezing my thoughts with every iced breath.
I know why he's doing this, so it would seem.
He's forcing my hand, while awaiting my death.

I sense that he's near, my breath still abated.
Now it would appear he has fruitfully waited.
I forfeit to my death, now caress me and take me.
His unholy breath, persists to bend me then break me

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  • 16 years ago

    by Cella Bella

    With so few lines this tells so much. This piece is rather haunting in a way and I adore it. Not to metion everything I've read so far seems so thought and you word each line just right. You have have a wonderful talent. 5/5

    marcella

  • 16 years ago

    by Teria

    ". . . bend me and break me."
    ^^ ". . . bend me [then] break me." ?

    Amazing job with this poem, darling.
    I loved it, once again. You're very, very talented.

    The emotion, and flow were flawless.
    And, the word choice was flawless minus one. Lol.

    Wonderful job.
    And, you got a 5 again. (:
    feel loved. haha.

  • 16 years ago

    by Robert

    First of all iced should be icy. The description is good and it carries the mood well but thats all it does it never draws closure to the bigger picture of the poem it almost l;eaves you hanging well thats the way I see it Plot121

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    Powerfully written, you said so much with just eight lines and that is really impressing. I like the ending line, it is really effective. Truly excellently written, with good imagery and greatly described feelings. It deserves 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Sandra D

    Wow... this is amazing!
    i took the same title in that contest, and its amazing how different the are :]
    but anyways, great job.
    it's so beautiful... in a dark way.
    5/5

    ~Sandra

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