Promised (Tyburn)

by my name is Llama   Oct 4, 2007


Shattered
Battered
Tattered
Scattered
Promises lost, shattered, battered, gone
Why make them then, tattered, scattered wrong

A tyburn is a six line poem with a set syllable count. The first four lines rhyme, with 2 syllables each and are all descriptive words. The last two lines rhyme, with 9 syllables each and incorporate the 1st, 2nd, 3rd, and 4th lines as the 5th to 8th syllables.

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  • 16 years ago

    by xxSuicidalxx

    Wow...I have never seen that kind of poem...amazing job on it! Very great wrod usage and even though it was short, had very strong emotions. Loved it! Keep writing! 5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I don't recall ever seeing this style before, and while I think it sounds a little difficult, you have mastered it beautifully here.

    A heartfelt and touching write, done so with beauty and grace.

  • 16 years ago

    by La Muse Angelique

    I didn't know of this one as well.
    I also agree that this was a very deep poem.
    I think you are very good in expressing feelings with such limited words, not everyone can do that.
    Again a great write :)

    5/5

    xo angelique

  • 16 years ago

    by Vanessa

    This is new to me as well, but it intrigued me, I love the word choice, it seemed perfect, and intresting at the same time, the vocab was great, the flow was flawless, the emotion was deep. again 5/5

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