False Care

by Shinobi   Oct 11, 2007


Going through hell
Never thought it would be this way
Hearing a ringing bell
Which leaves me with nothing to say

Tried to change
Maybe getting a little bit better
Opened up a new page
But I can't write a single latter

I'm trying hard to improve
But stuck in a misty land
People around pretend to care
And falsely giving their adding hand

Rage fills me
I had some bad moments before
I can now see
That life aren't true anymore

Stuck in the same reality
Society's behavior is something I can't bare
They try to change you for their sake
And the only thing you get in return is false care

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  • 16 years ago

    by Brittney Follett

    I could feel the anger and desperation in you words.. very powerful... your rhyming is amazing.. only one issue:

    Never though it would be this way

    didnt you mean thought?

    amazing job babe:

  • 16 years ago

    by Crystal Gaze

    A very well written peice, I can feel the anger and pain surge through each word. Excellent.

    'I'm trying hard to improve
    But stuck in a misty land
    People around pretend to care
    And falsely giving their adding hand'

    ^ I think atleast once- if not more- we feel like this in our life. Well expressed.

    'Stuck in the same reality
    Society's behavior is something I can't bare
    They try to change you for their sake
    And the only thing you get in return is false care'

    ^ I think this is a strong conclusion, and I applaud your choice.

    Well done,
    My Favourite peice so far:)
    --Elly.

  • 16 years ago

    by SH3S fiNAllY H3R3 l0V3 U N3NA

    Very sad poem, but it's great. I loved it so much. Great job!!! 5/5

    <mOnStRiTo'S pRiNcEsS>

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