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This poem i wrote for the movie we are marshals Please Comment

Clocks tick but time doesn't pass
There once was noise but now its still
We once were whole but now we're shattered
The sun rises the sun sets
We onced loved but now we're broken
We lost our loved ones
we lost our team
we lost our family
and started to lose ourself
But from the ashes we will rise
and we will fight
for them who died
we will not give up till the end
we will be one
and we will win.