The i die

by xxSuicidalxx   Oct 22, 2007


Churning darkeness
empty mind
breathing deep
one last time
take the bottle
in my hand
swallow more
than intentially planned
I feel the world fall
and spin and twist
then i get
my one last wish
last beating
of my heart
the small heart
that has been dead from being torn apart
I stare blankly
at the skies
away from the worlds
cruel lies
then i die

definalty a cruddy poem...but oh well...

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  • 16 years ago

    by The Pessimistic Peabody

    Interesting and sad. enjoyable tho. I loved
    the ".I feel the world fall
    and spin and twist
    then i get
    my one last wish" part.....The poem was formed from a twisted mind in a twisted heartbreaking way but it was enjoyable.....5/5

  • 16 years ago

    by abcede

    This is Definitely not a cruddy poem!!! keep it up, man!!

  • 16 years ago

    by xXxemzxXx

    Hey i love this poem i dont think itz cruddy at all keep it up :)

  • 16 years ago

    by The Queen of Spades

    I wouldn't say its a "cruddy" poem, it's got a lot of meaning and depth behind it, it could just use some editing. Keep at your work!

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