Hey if u read this and that poem is True i have to say something your mother will always love you trust me im 15 and i have put my mother through hell i have ran away from home i've tryed killing myself i have tryed everything im now pregnant and live with my 20 year old boyfriend and guess where i am right now at my mothers you mother will always love you
I really liked this one. It had a really good flow, and you could feel just how sad the little girl was. I liked how you put "Mummy" instead of "Mommy" you could actually tell how the little girl sounded.
The only thing I saw wrong was:
"Mummy, why won't you look at me?
All you do is cry cos I look like Daddy."
Me and Daddy didn't really rhyme, but I loved this poem so much I didn't really care. Great job!
I love how you used the words "mummy" and "daddy", it really placed emphasis on the love expressed through the poem, making the turnout of it all the more effective, in a bitter sense.
Well written, keep it up!
This poem and so deep and touching... its really emotional. The way it was written was soo beautiful! I loved the flow, the word choice, and the concept. Its was soo moving... 5/5 and it more than deserves it!