Fools and Dreams

I wont talk about how the flow of the opening lines, already suggested.

sO just let me talk only about the concept which I really loved, was more like a lyrical story.
with a gd message.

nothin to complain about, only suggests rewording it in a more poetic way

5/5 still

This is a masterpiece

You know I'm getting a little bit sick of you writing poems about me sweetie, I mean it's charming and all to pen a dittie about our online love...but, really, a set of naked pics would have been more appropriate.

I like this poem, but i felt that whatever you were writing about was too fresh and close to you, and it limited the metaphor and depth you could have put into this....not a negative point, some poems are meant to be raw....

You know what I mean.

Still, who can write about me without some angelic script....you did well.

Nice poem... funny ending

I love this,
great work