Where Did It Go Wrong?

by SH3S fiNAllY H3R3 l0V3 U N3NA   Oct 29, 2007


I remember like it was yesterday
I was running around your feet
And asking you to carry me
We were so close

I was your first daughter
Your most favorite
You cared for me
Like no one else had

Now we can't stand each other
Not even be in the same room
We always argue
Screaming all the time

All I'm asking you is
Where did we go wrong?

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  • 18 years ago

    by L0V3 Mi fAMilY

    BABY, U GOTTA WORK THINGS OUT WITH UR DAD. JUST KNOW THAT U STILL HAVE ME OK.

  • 18 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    I love this.

    I was reading this thinking how many people will be able to relate to this write? I bet it's a hell of a lot.

    Anyway. The emotion and depth you put into this piece were nicely done, easily felt by the reader, and I thoughted it flowed well throughout.

  • 18 years ago

    by Veamm

    Excellent!

    hmm?

    For this one, I can really see your message. but I think this one have a lack of rhymes..but that for me..

    keep it up!

  • 18 years ago

    by Kyle

    Awww such a sad poem....im sorry. i could feel the emotion you put in this, and you wrote it very well. good job. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Anonymous Angel

    Hey,
    a nice poem and unfortunately I know what you are talking about. i argue a lot with my mother, and I dont mean it.
    the poem is a very good example of a poem that doesnt rhyme but with a nice flow. 5/5
    kisses stephanie

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