Earth and Dreams Union

by NyellMoonlight   Nov 21, 2007


Magenta shades spilled over my pillow tonight
bringing dreams colored as fresh blood that flowed
down the riverside, mirroring in lustrous sky...
...the taste of the perfection was real, alluring.

Awareness turned off, and the senses danced with stars
defining my twisted identity that paint deformed clouds...
I fell in love with your hazel eyes behind vermilion glances,
succumbed to enchanting movements of ancient lobes.

The wanderer inside of me waved colorful, complicated tapestries
relinquishing doubts and fragmented traces of grotesque past...
my tears vaporized, burned on the tides of your warm breath.
Exotic fruits tasted like the most treasured magic...

Oh, I was lost amongst chocolate-colored, tasteful visions
bewitched by the brilliance of the musical words that you whispered,
captured inside verdant spheres of pure beauty that shimmered.
Whole world spun with the enchantments that unleashed my entity...

...And why wouldn't you love me just the way I am?

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  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    (spun)-haha spun
    Anyway here are my thoughts about this piece.

    Your writing-Pricelless
    atmosphere-captivating
    expressed emotions-mixed with outstanding images yet so clear and easy to be admired
    first stanza-So powerful first lines, great
    second stanza-Beautiful!!!
    third stanza- Maybe my favorite one, so so unique and it posses some breath-taking tone of poetic perfectness
    fourth stanza- I am bewitched by it's brilliance
    ending- WOW, wow! Perfect ending, totally mind-blowing, this is the ending that it is so intense and passionate, it makes superb twist and all about that ending line is wow! The rhythm of poem didn't slow don't too much, no I don't know what to say, really, just perfect ending. Touching too...
    choice of words-amazing
    flow-I just want to say that I was absolutely lost in this poem and I mean that in excellent way.
    imagery- flawlless

    All in all this is one of my favorites from you, and it goes in to my favorite poems, I love it! You wrote another masterpiece, I don't have to say anything negative about this piece and I honestly hate in this moment person that dared
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    You should be proud on your self, this is amazing!

  • 16 years ago

    by Blissful

    Wow that first sentence really captured my attention. You put so much meanging and effort in each line that it really appeals to the reader. Beautiful. After reading each sentence I stopped to savor its beautify..

    "Oh, I was lost amongst chocolate-colored, tasteful visions"
    ^fave line ... flawless imagery. *5/5*

  • 16 years ago

    by 4 track demo

    I could truly taste the colors and the passion, what a wonderful splendor, exactly what i needed to read today...emotionally crippling, and yet soothing my head...you excel at
    your craft...thank you...
    john

  • 16 years ago

    by NightFlyer

    I don't know what I can possibly add after all these descriptive comments to your fantastic poem. But I am definitely blown away by the way you combined the erotic with the phantasmagoric so brilliantly! It compels me to check out more of your poems.

  • 16 years ago

    by debbylyn

    So colorful....beautiful....metaphorically awesome write! The images are rich and the whole piece has a sad and hauntiing romantic feel to it....I love the way you've incorporated dreams and universe into the theme....

    Always a joy to read your beautiful creations....take care, Debbie

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