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Because a second with you feels like an eternity in heaven. that was my fav line keep it up.

That was a good read, it's very sweet. The last line was really strong. using the last line/word as the title is great. It adds up the the total beauty of the poem in my opinion. Anyway keep up the good work.

Liked it a lot. keep them comming girl!

"Every time you leave I cant help but to cry"
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This line did not flow very well. Take out 'to', and it will have a much better flow.

"Strong emotion surfaces in my heart"
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Again, another line you can change to help the flow. Try, "Strong emotions surface in my heart"

"As I realize that we are now to be apart"
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I did not like this line at all. It really read wrong for me. Try "I realize now that we are to be apart"

"But only for a night for a new day is to appear"
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Take out 'for'

Ok, there are a lot of things I didn't like about this poem. First of all, you desperately need to add punctuation to this piece. There are two pauses in this piece. You need to add comas, periods and apostrophes. This will all help your reader understand your poem.

Second, there were some really cheesy rhymes, 'another' and 'butter'. Really, there are so many other words you could have used.

Third, your flow. It was off and on throughout the poem. You sort of managed to get it back after the third verse.

You have a lot of editting to do with this piece, in MY opinion. It's up to you if you take my advice or not. I'm just trying to help you to be a better writer.

The contents of this poem however, were very sweet, romantic and passionate. That element you have down to a tee. You just need to work on the structuring of your poem. Together, they create wonderful poetry.

Thanks for the read.

Genuine words from the heart...very well expressed, cute and sweetly done...Good Job..