Ink Bruises My Insides

by Melissa   Jan 15, 2008


With only the rain to hear me,
my voice grumbles within
or maybe it was thunder
following sheets of overwriting

(Could it be true,
is poetry becoming too fleshy
overly written with no purpose,
a simple, sweatless
lackluster design?)

I'm missing old ink
and the way it use to speak
with such diligence,
pointing dreams towards stars
painting stars into dreams
then waking more knowing
than before sleep

but lately my words stretch out
like limp dandelions
across sodden land,
they use to tell me flowery things

until this cliched tongue came along
spitting on everything,

yet pen keeps telling me,
"sweetheart, you might want to write it down"

so I do

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  • 15 years ago

    by HOLLY ARMER

    "I'm missing old ink
    and the way it use to speak
    with such diligence,
    pointing dreams towards stars
    painting stars into dreams
    then waking more knowing
    than before sleep"

    I relate so well to that.
    I've only finished one poem in the past 2 years and it was such a struggle.
    Poetry used to flow so easily from my pen, these days it's so hard. I don't remember writing ever being this difficult.
    Thanks for sharing this, I totally can relate to it more than you'd ever know.
    Take care.

  • 16 years ago

    by limp

    Gorgeous.
    no other word for it.

  • 16 years ago

    by FallenAngel44

    5/5 That was great! I really think that it's becoming true with me as well :/ I really like the line comparing the writing to dandelions. The imagry was perfect and it was amazing! Keep writing! You're doing a great job!

    Tara

  • 16 years ago

    by Kim

    Melissa this was fanatastic. heehee it made me giggle it was so adorable and beautiful!
    "pointing dreams towards stars
    painting stars into dreams"
    ^
    Love it!!! This was such a wonderful poem and you managed to convey the idea of writing being superfluous but I think this poem was excellent and not a limp dandelion at all!!! Excellent work!

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow...
    This is amazing and absolutely enchanting. So original piece, soaked in sincerity and emotions expressed on so unique way. Your descriptions are magically vivid, portrayed with deep thoughts and so creative imagery. This poem simply sings to me from the beginning to the end, filled with lively rhythm and admirable stanzas.
    I can't chose my favorite part, this piece is breathtaking from the beginning to the end. I can relate to this in a way.
    The ending lines are superb, so effective. Magnificent conclusion for the whole poem.
    I'm putting this to my favorites. You are truly talented and creative writer.
    Amazingly done!
    Keep writing

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