When you walked into my life

thx

Another great poem, Catie. Again, I'd fix the shourthand (u, ur). You seem to have a great grasp of the english language. Using those shortcuts, just detracts from your beautiful writing.

I love this stanza:

its night all the time
its not a happy world
it is so depressing here
my stomach is all curled

to make it flow better though, I'd either make the last line start like the rest, or change one or two of the others. Here are a couple suggestion:

it's night all the time
it's not a happy world
it's so depressing here
it's made my stomach curl

OR

it's night all the time
no happiness in my world
there's just depression here
my stomach is all curled

You truly are a talented young lady. Keep up the good work