Blameless

by firexdancer   Mar 20, 2008


"It wasn't your fault"
The words follow me wherever I go,
inked into the many fallen pages of a torn diary,
etched bloodily into the flesh of my arms.
Haunting me endlessly,
echoing inside my mind in bursts of staining black.

"Why do you hurt yourself?"
I want to scream an answer to this question,
yet I never do, never will.
I don't have the answer they want.
Yet my mouth burns ravenously, wanting to spit the words out at them.
My tongue, however, is empty of the truth.
I smile condescendingly at their horrified faces,
doing whatever I can to escape.

"Just be a good girl and everything'll be fine"
Can you not understand?
I'm not good. I'm bad, tainted, my very essence poisoned and corrupted.
Don't touch me. I'll contaminate you.
Just stay away, keep an image in your head of me, smiling, happy, innocent.
Never come close enough to look past my mask, and then everything will be okay.
I don't want anyone to put me back together again, I deserve to be shattered.

"You don't understand!"
How many times have I heard that?
I don't want to count.
The one saying it should be me, but I won't.
Being misunderstood is part of me,
when people finally understand,
their empathy will eventually turn to pity.
I can't stand it, hate would be easier to tolerate than sadness.
Don't be sad for me, be sad for yourself, you're much more important than I'll ever be.
Just leave me alone, if you get to close to me I'll hurt you.
Somehow, I will. I'll lie, cheat, slap, and kick my way around you, until you have no other option but to loathe me. But I deserve it.
I always break everything, it's now my turn to be broken.

"It's not your fault."
Sure, keep saying that while you're holding me.
I know you don't mean it.
But I'll nod my head like the doll I should be as if I believed you.
I'll just go along with it,
with your desperate need to feel pure, good, you'll be able to shut out all the other signs.
My hands can't stop shaking, the cuts on my wrists pale white yet swollen.
The scars reminders of how I deserve pain, and the hideous ecstasy that comes along with it.
But just ignore them, I don't want you to know anyway.
Keep repeating those words to yourself, over and over again, trying to reassure me but really reassuring yourself.
I'll just sit there and break soundlessly.
Sure sure.
Watch me smile the way you want me to as I repeat it back to you.
I'm blameless.
You won't even notice the lie behind the words, but of course you never did.
Ha. Blameless.

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  • 9 years ago

    by David

    This was excellent, your poems have improved so much! i loved how it flowed so easily. such a nice and easy read. well done.

    5/5 David

  • 9 years ago

    by SiLeNtLy ScReAmInG

    "It wasn't your fault"
    The words follow me wherever I go,
    inked into the many fallen pages of a torn diary,
    etched bloodily into the flesh of my arms.
    Haunting me endlessly,
    echoing inside my mind in bursts of staining black.

    I liked how you used the quotes in this stanza Gaby. It emphasized the picture you started to paint even with this first stanza. Creative choice of words, not just bland words, but interesting ones that worked well in the metaphors. "Inked into the fallen pages of a torn diary" I could just picture that line, very descriptive. I'm not sure bloodily is a word, but it might be, and it did describe well what you were trying to say. "echoing inside my mind in bursts of staining black" I liked that description a lot. it was unique and I know of some of those echos. I like how all of the lines described the first 2 lines. they were adding emphasis.

    Okay see detailed comment on that one stanza now I'm gonna comment on the poem as a whole, don't ask me why, I just am. alright the poem was good, descriptive and powerful. The words you chose to describe everything were interesting, and good choices of words, and also powerful choices of words, but I think the flow of the poem might use a little work. Yes each line connected, and made sense too, but you could tweak the lines or the order of the wording to improve the flow a little bit. Play with the word order ha sometimes it can get frustrating, or annoying, but tweaking word order and choice here and there could make the flow better.

    There really were parts of this poem that reminded me of people I know, and myself personally too. Lines here and there I was like "ooohh that fits so well with what so and so says" and stuff like that. You did a good job with the poem Gaby. I recognized the line "don't touch me I'll contaminate you" from your title contest, I was considering using that title actually for the contest, but when I tried to write I got kinda stumped. Anyway also for this poem I liked the very last line "ha blameless" The entire poem just felt like someone speaking, very passionately, powerfully, but speaking their mind, I thought this line was just very clear of what you were saying and the emotions associated with the word and idea of blameless.

    okay I'm done rambling in the comment, I'm not even sure it makes sense.You did good with expressing what you wanted to say. It was very clear. I give you 5/5 for the poem. nicely done, but I really wanna see what you could do with a poem that has a set style, you're good with this kind of free verse stuff I want to see how well you could also do with a styled poem. ooohh and I also liked the quotes at the beginning of each line, I almost forgot to say that. it worked well in the poem. nice job.

  • 9 years ago

    by Cayce

    Wow. This was long, but I could relate to it so much that I didn't even care.

    "It wasn't your fault"

    ^^ What a powerful way to start off a poem. I've heard so many people say this to me, and I just don't believe them. I've never been too fond of quotation marks and like "talking" in poems, but I think it works here.

    inked into the many fallen pages of a torn diary,
    etched bloodily into the flesh of my arms.

    ^^ Such great imagrey here. Your vocabulary is stunning. The second line is what sticks with me though, because it just brings back some hard unwanted memories. ><

    "Why do you hurt yourself?"
    I want to scream an answer to this question,
    yet I never do, never will.

    ^^ Oh my gosh. >< I know this exact feeling. So many people have asked me this, and I just never tell them, because they wouldn't understand. I know they wouldn't, so I just keep it locked away deep inside me somewhere.

    I smile condescendingly at their horrified faces,
    doing whatever I can to escape.

    ^^ Ahhh, this made an evil grin come over my face. Amazing.

    Anyways, I'd love to copy and paste everything that I can relate to about this poem, but I'd have to do the whole thing. Haha. It was brillantly written, and even though it didn't rhyme it had a great flow and held my attention the entire time. Your vocabulary was intellegent, but you didn't overdo it. It was pretty easy to understand or at least it was to me. The ending. Omg. I loved it. It even made me laugh a little. Amazing amzaing job, darling!!

    Keep writing!
    Cayce

  • 9 years ago

    by Ixora

    "I don't want anyone to put me back together again, I deserve to be shattered."

    &

    "Don't be sad for me, be sad for yourself, you're much more important than I'll ever be."

    it was very hard to pick out anything that stood out here for me but those were ones i can really connect to right now. It shows you really ripped this from your soul hun...i hope things get better for you one day, there's no solidifying reason but there is hope *shrugs* people can do a lot on hope alone you know ((hope mind you not faith : P)). great poem 5/5

    *^*crow*^*

  • 9 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    "Don't touch me. I'll contaminate you."
    haha.
    F.uck I love that line! Brilliant.

    Again, I liked it and I didn't. I liked the thought behind it, but I really think you'd be a stronger writing at prose. I'm not sure why, it's just a feeling.
    And forgive me if that's insulting, I'm just giving my opinion. =/.

    I don't know. It's like I can feel the emotion wanting to peak in your writing, but somehow, it just never seems to shine through. I know you can do it, I know you have potential...
    Just try to find that potential in your heart.
    Remember: write with your heart, not your mind.

    xox.
    xTheEcstasyofSuicidex 4.5

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