Liquid

by Natalie   Apr 1, 2008


Memories;
Engulf broken heart.
Tip-toeing down lovers lane.

Was it love?
Or lust?
Truth is only a stranger.
And only he can tell.

But what about my trust?
Confined spaces fell apart.

Memories;
Engulf broken heart.
And the tears drip like liquid.

- Written for contest.

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  • 17 years ago

    by xoOrdinaryGirlox

    May I congradulate you for taking joint third :) I simply could not pick one. It was so hard.

    #1

    I love short poems, and I am truly mesmerized at how you put so much emotion and feeling into such a short and simple piece! I absolutely loved it :) Thankyou for entering it, it made the contest worth while :)

  • 17 years ago

    by RavishingEruption

    Amazing!
    i like how you started and ended with a version of the same line. great free verse. i liked it a lot! : )

    5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow...
    I really like this. You portrayed your emotions excellently and managed to say so much within such short piece which is impressive. I can relate to this write in a way. I like the atmosphere that you created and the fact that every word seem perfectly picked.
    Greatly done!

  • 17 years ago

    by Syn

    Very good:-)

    great write, good read:-)

    5/5, you have my vote.

  • 17 years ago

    by L0V3 Mi fAMilY

    An amazing poem.
    Beautifully written.
    Hope you do good in the contest.
    5/5

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