Four Walls [And You]

by Melpomene   Apr 15, 2008


Shatter my silence within the four walls of mind,
For sepia images of you have become intertwined,
Mixing burnt chemicals of my hearts imagination,
Replay becomes paused dealt with procrastination.

"It's my fault" I hush with the ink of black pen,
Delaying outcomes now makes no difference to then,
Video clips whisk within the "What ifs" and "Whys"
Though still I refused to listen to regrets goodbyes.

Her taunting words were sketched into my work of art,
"He told me he loved me" Hun, he loved me from start,
Though your lies were smart, I'll forgive but not forget,
As we are both living in the past of your stinging regret.

    report violation
3


Did You Like This Poem?

Latest Comments

  • 15 years ago

    by Lover Boii

    I really liked it, the rhyme scheme was great.

  • 16 years ago

    by Jaymes Haze

    I'm trying to figure out if the sadness is being felt by one person, or if the pain is felt by someone who's relationship was seemingly stolen from them from the original person.
    I can't tell.
    There was far more obvious rhyming here, and I liked it.

  • 16 years ago

    by Nix

    Wow! I enjoyed so much in this piece, it posses very interesting rhymes and priceless originality.
    I love every line, you put so much emotions within words and expressed your self excellently with very creative metaphors.
    First stanza is maybe my favorite one, it is so remarkable and I really admire your ability to write incredible thought like that one and still it was so clear and easy to read. Ending is also effective and you managed to truly touch me with whole poem.
    Fantastically written.

  • 16 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow...
    This is my favorite from the three of yours pieces I've read today. I am in awe, honestly impressed. Whole poem holds an amount of deep and heartfelt feelings which are expressed in excellent way. This is brilliant, so touching. Every stanza seem flawless to me and I can't find anything to critique. I re-read this three times and tried to find favorite part but every line is breathtaking and whole poem is compact and truly perfect as it is. I think that you did excellent job with rhymes, too, they're not too ordinary and basic and you created flawless flow within each stanza. Once again I wish that this piece was longer because I deeply enjoyed yet I don't think that you should change anything about it.

    Keep writing!
    5/5 from me

  • 16 years ago

    by Kaila

    The middle stanza was my favorite
    The first one was i dont know
    not my favorite maybe
    I'm not quite sure how sepia works?
    but I dont know just my opinion
    the ending was alright
    not your best ending
    but not your worst
    nice job
    5/5

Read All Comments (7)

More Poems By Melpomene