I love this. I wish it was longer because I truly liked it from the first to the last line but it is very effective like this too because you managed to say so much within just two stanzas. I like your choice of words a lot. The imagery that you portrayed in each stanza is breathtaking, very intense. You expressed emotions excellently, too, I could feel everything that you described.
Overall, greatly written sad poem.
5/5 from me