Walking The Line

by Natalie   Apr 22, 2008


So solitary, On the bathroom floor,
Wiping the tears my reflection saw,
Time's a wasting before my eyes,
Drawing the line of my own demise.

Eyes rolling back into my head,
Spinning thoughts of things he said,
And as I leave everything behind,
I just keep on walking the line.

- This is not a cutting poem. Would love any feedback.

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  • 9 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    "So solitary, On the bathroom floor,
    Wiping the tears my reflection saw,
    Time's a wasting before my eyes,
    Drawing the line of my own demise."

    Wonderful opening stanza, excellent flow and word choice! This poem told was very sad, but you wrote this very well. I enjoyed reading this, keep writing, always and forever...

  • 9 years ago

    by ether

    Write more

  • 9 years ago

    by Sharr

    Nice ;) .

  • 9 years ago

    by Lonely Rider

    A very powerful poem...
    the word choice is great...

    "So solitary, On the bathroom floor,
    Wiping the tears my reflection saw,
    Time's a wasting before my eyes,
    Drawing the line of my own demise."

    ^^ loved the first stanza... so much emotions burst out from these lines..
    the way you have described the turmoil within you is awesome..

    I loved the last line
    "I just keep on walking the line."

    it increases impact made by your poem...

    Excellent poem..

  • 9 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow...
    I love this. I wish it was longer because I truly liked it from the first to the last line but it is very effective like this too because you managed to say so much within just two stanzas. I like your choice of words a lot. The imagery that you portrayed in each stanza is breathtaking, very intense. You expressed emotions excellently, too, I could feel everything that you described.
    Overall, greatly written sad poem.
    5/5 from me