Back Down South

by Colm   Jul 22, 2014

Back down South, where you grew up on Bible
and cattle ranching was where we were at our best,
our honeymoon period in the Texan summer.
I bought a broken up, once-red convertible
that roared us from Dallas to small town life.
It doubled as a bed and I almost forgot how it veered
off left when I tried to help you navigate the map.

I used to joke that the freckle on your shoulder
Was a cartographer (I baptised him Manny) - And the shadows
under your eyes in the mornings after we slept together
but didn't sleep were miniature elephant tombs.
You would smile like a baby and I would remind myself
To remember.

Now, every once in a while I pull back the dusty cover
And sit in it.
I face South.

Written for Baby Rainbow's club battle challenge


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  • 3 years ago

    by Poet on the Piano

    This is such an enjoyable read! I can clearly imagine being raised in the South, and you have such an ease and natural flow with your verses. There's a lot of character here which stands out to me... it makes me think of reading something out of a novel about this adventurous love, alive and always dreaming. The part about the freckle on the shoulder is unique and makes this piece more charming. A very reminiscent poem that has those bittersweet moments of those younger years.

    Congrats on the win!

  • 3 years ago

    by Meena Krish

    Very well penned with a country backdrop and feelings to go with it. Congrats on the win!

  • 3 years ago

    by Britt

    You're not country, yet you smack this outta the park. What the heck, Colm! :P This is beautiful!