Dark Passenger

by Meme   Sep 20, 2014


It screams within me
where the sun fails to
cast its light, where
this wound he left me
became a scar.

Yes I tried..

I rubbed like a frantic
child the traces of a
mistaken love, but I
could still feel the
remnants of it engraved
so deep on my pale skin.

He promised to walk me
through the reasons of his
street-magic obsession,
and I waited there
-his audience of one-
but the lights never came
on and the blanket that I
held so tight just imprisoned
the cold I felt inside.

How come I could not
disappear right under it?

--

It's not okay now to not
feel equal to the day; there
wasn't even an argument,
he balanced my sanity.

That demented side of
me keeps wanting to
scratch. For that scar
to become a wound,
for that wound to bleed,
for the memories to
come back and replace
the dark passenger
that hitchhiked his place.

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© Copyright 2014 by: gIrL
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  • 2 years ago

    by silvertung69

    This poem reminds me of the promises I've made ....
    And broken I had no idea it hurt that bad..

    • 2 years ago

      by Meme

      Well now you do know...

  • 3 years ago

    by Dancing Rivers

    My oh my, that was exceptionally touching, the words so intricately woven to create a basket of emotion that just tugs at a readers heart, we are the marionettes and you are the puppeteer, your words the strings attached to our hearts.so incredible :-)

    • 3 years ago

      by Meme

      Oh thank you so much, your words mean a lot :)

  • 3 years ago

    by Baby Rainbow

    Yay!!! Meme is back!!

    I love this poem!

    The title is so strong and cryptic, really drew me in to find out what this passenger was.

    Your opening was amazing, describing that place so dark, where there is never sunlight or happiness, only this sorrow and depression, loneliness and regret.

    The idea in the beginning of the scar, and how it now becomes that trace of love in your past, a reminder that it will always be within you and in your mind. It introduces this character who you believed to be a good person, and you took a chance on them, but they let you down and left you with this awful pain.

    Good imagery of a child trying to get rid of a mark, by rubbing it constantly. You can see the desperation here of how much you wish this scar away, but even if it was to disappear, you would still feel it.

    I love the street magic stanza, very unique, and it details how you waited on this person and became trapped in the loneliness, excellent wording with the blanket there.
    Again, it comes tot he child-like state of thinking where they believe if they hide under a blanket, it will make them disappear.

    That demented side of
    me keeps wanting so
    scratch.

    - I believe "so" should be "to. ??

    Really great ending, going back to the scar, and how you wish the memories were real again so this dark passenger inside of you would go away. It is like the person you are writing about wasn't the best thing for you, but looking back now, he seems to be better for you than this dark place.

    Really good write. So glad to see you writing :)

    • 3 years ago

      by Meme

      Thank you So much hon :)

  • 3 years ago

    by Maple Tree

    Meme- You have stunned me tonight... You and I connect with our poetry.. we always have... love this piece! <3 you

    • 3 years ago

      by Meme

      Yup. We always do, thats why I love your poem a lot, I always get them.

      And I love you too <3