Would you hear me if
I wrote my thoughts in red? Would
that make time unwind and erase
the memories painted in my
head? Rhythm won't cure you
and I won't pretend I'm harmonic
with the world anymore.
I'm out of sync with this wasted ink
plastered to make sense. I'm rambling
inside this circle I'm forced to call
my life. It never ends but won't
begin to flourish like these summer
flowers do, I'm jealous I can't be
prefect like you.
Eyes shine bright with the promise
of tomorrow but I'm still
hugging on to yesterday's sorrow.
Poor me unable to forget, poor you
thinking I would forgive. Laughable,
unbelievable, this lie you tell
yourself. I'm the truth you let
out of the box, I'm the secret you wish
had been lost.
Would you believe me if I told you
demons were real? They are the
tender wounds we won't allow to heal.
They pick and they scratch until
you lie broken, they live and they
thrive the longer left open.
But now my words are flowing and
covering these scars. I stutter proud,
my voice booming loud, I won't be
yours anymore. I leave you behind...
dust in the corner of my mind,
you're nothing now. A coward you stand,
less than a man, to silence a woman's tongue.
The flow to this poem is what really impressed me this week. There is nothing worse than trying to read a lengthy poem that has a very rough, or a non existent flow, but this poem really was easy to read and the rhyming throughout really matched the flow also, subtle and not forced. The message of the poem was portrayed well with the battle within oneself. Trying to move on from someone who has hurt you, perhaps beaten your confidence down, but this author shows they are not ready to give up and that they will be proud of who they are. The use of the stutter works well because it shows that despite having this struggle with words, their confidence is now growing and they managed to get the words out eventually. The ending was very powerful, comparing this worthless character to dust which only takes up a small part of the mind now, shows healing and moving on. Really good write.
Well this poem left me speechless!
The message of love lost I presume, but just wow!!!
The rhyme scheme in this was elegantly placed in areas that made is so incredibly unique to me. The flow had a rhythm, and that is difficult to do, when you take into consideration of the tone of message in this piece. I applaud Lady Nik for this piece here... The wording was tasteful and very creative. Powerful and well written piece this week!!