Once upon a time,
a tired tree looked at the sky
and wondered: "when will I be able to fly
to see the ground from above!"
He prayed to the sun, but also to the moon.
He asked the winds to grant him some wings.
Yet no matter how much he prayed,
he still remained enrooted on the ground
while feeding and living a modest life.
Then one day, there came a man.
This man looked at the tree and smiled in peace.
He then reclined on the tree's trunk
while observing the sky above
and wondering: "when will I be able to fly
to see the ground from above."
Suddenly, he stood in a hurry
and left to his house
to then come back with an axe.
The man hurried home once again
but this time to built a small wooden plane.
Hence, the tree became a plane without life;
a ghost seeing the ground from the sky above.
Luce, as always this is unique and a very intriguing piece. I guess it could be taken different like me I saw both the positive and negative in this.
1/ I like how this starts like a fairy-tale with once upon a time. I imagine a tree begging to be able to fly to see the ground from higher up than what it does already and weeping because it's unable to lol not that trees weep but who knows?
2/ Here we have it the tree would pray to anyone he thought would listen to get wings but his dreams like most fairy tales didn't come true not without something bad happening anyway.. So he stays living his life even if he stills wants to fly as he knows he isn't able to.
3/ Then, it seems he finds (let's call him a friend lol) someone with the same aspirations of being able to fly but he doesn't yet know his own fate and who in life does?
4/ uh-oh like any fairy - tale a turn in the story. I think hurried should be hurry though. Second line I think may read better with for in place of to. Just a suggestion though.
5/ Oh no the poor tree, green peace will have his guts for garters lol. Should built be build?
6/ The tree here makes the ultimate sacrifice to be able to fly and see the ground from the sky.
I'm glad you like it. I am actually thinking about this piece. For me, this piece instead of hopeful is tragic. So I am not sure how others may see it. I'm glad you were able to see the positive aspect.