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by Aegis   Jun 6, 2017


I was an abandoned marigold
forced to prosper in the
absence of a
transient
sun-

Promethean.

But striving for the sky has
stripped me of my roots,
and I wonder if I have
blossomed from
you,

or because of you.

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  • 3 months ago

    by Meena Krish

    Judging Comment:

    “…and I wonder if I have blossomed from you, or because of
    you” A lingering question which has taken me deep into this
    write. From start to end there is sadness definitely yet in
    certain parts it feels like the author is best without this person
    and at the same time what it would be like if that person had
    given some of her time to him. Lonely and sad prevailing feel throughout this write…touching.

  • 3 months ago

    by Thomas

    Judging comment:

    "“I was an abandoned marigold”
    Just this starting line: beautiful in its spaciousness, its ability to present such a vast expansive world, a flower alone in a field. This really drew me in and held me prisoner, needing to read more.

    “Promethean.”
    A line of just a single word, much like the marigold, abandoned to live by itself within the poem. And quite an interesting choice of comparison here - Promethean, being especially creative, innovative even, and Prometheus, the fire thief, here as the marigold without a sun.

    And that ending - “I wonder… or because of you” so dazzlingly closes the piece with the inquiry of whether the narrator has sprouted from “you” or in the course of having known “you”. A beautifully crafted, thoughtful write."

  • 4 months ago

    by beyouplur

    How could you go on?
    Your abandoned aching soul is so damn beautiful..
    Shine on and blossom from within :)

  • 4 months ago

    by Ren

    I agree. This poem is extremely deep and incredibly sad, full of such a sorrowful uncertainty, and written so beautifully. Well done, and much love and peace to you!

  • 4 months ago

    by mossgirl19

    I feel so sorry after reading the poem and the story behind it. The poem is beautiful. The wondering at the end is so raw and honest. I believe that you have blossomed in both ways.

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