I'd do it all over again, if I could just have your love the same, I don't care, I don't mind, that you'd leave me again, just one more time, let me hold your hand, and kiss you once more. Just one more time, and come back running, holding your hands out to me, like I really mean a thing, just hang on one more time, can't take this pain any longer, if only I had you to make the pain simmer, just one more time. Go ahead tell me you'll leave again, you'll just come back running, it's all the same, I'd do it all over again. I don't mind, I don't care, as long as you're here, I'd come back running, I'd do it all over again, to just have you care for one more day. Go ahead say it!! You're leaving, just like before, but that's ok, I said I'd do it all over again, I don't care and I don't mind anymore. I'll try to breathe as I cry, just like before, it's all the same, you'll just come back running. I'll take you for who you are, if you'll take me for everything, I'd do it all over again, it's all the same, just one more time, and one more day, hold on for a little longer. I would have given you the world, if you had given me your love, I would have shown you the way to my heart, if you hadn't torn it apart. It's all the same, but I'd do it all over again. you'd just come back running.
The repeation was amazingly well placed, and even though a song gave you your insperation, you can tell its from the heart as well. it was really kind of sad at least thats how I interperted it, the poem was a little hard to follow in some places, but the emtion made up for that, all in all I would have to say you did an excellent job. 5/5
Well done. Very, very well done. If only this hadn't been from a song but from your heart, I think the emotional power would be stronger and it would be that much more easy to relate to. I thought it was lovely. Stanzas would be lovely and more visually appealing to the eye just as an fyi. I noticed a lot of your poems are like this. Well done. 5/5