Honestly, this poem makes me wanna cry because of how true it is. War isn't funny and lost of innocent lives are taken every single day because of it. This isn't what God wanted...No it's not at all. I just hope that when the bad guys die, they understand their crimes...R.I.P to the heroes and angels who have died. May God bless your souls.
When I read this I think about the Iraq war and think about all the innocent people who have been slaughtered and murdered. It is real eye opener of a poem and really conveys sorrow and loss well xxx alex xxx
This poem felt slightly cliche to me which ruined the sad, raw and distraught feel you may have been trying to accomplish.
Your rhyme and rhythm was well thought out but maybe you need to higher your vocabulary to pull off such a sad poem.
keep writing kiddo you have potential to be something we only dream to be.