Atachment to a lovable imagination

by Espoirfailed   Jun 4, 2007


Atachment to a lovable imagination

I'm vaguely remembering what I've done,
Thinking I should try it again
Because breathing was always fun...
But someone told me to never look back, directed me along this winding track.
I'm guessing that it's straight and narrow,
But that's only a cliche again,
I fell for one once before,
Something about cupid's arrow.
And the direction it struggled to find.
Rockets struggle to leave the sky,
And it's all a little clearer inside your mind.
Where neurones, well they're only neurones,
And chemicals pass between them like leaves in the wind.
They stretch out to your heart,
With its four chambers and separate parts.
One of yours would have done me,
Because, baby, I've already had the other three.
Open your eyes and tell me what you see.
I don't mean the landscape,
God, not even the people,
Too many initiatives I tried to resuscitate.
I'm talking Plato and Aristotle,
Or maybe I'm just speaking from an empty bottle.
But minds are hollow and some are just empty,
I've been here before, not once but twenty times. And always one too less.
I'm not asking you to get me out of this mess.
But a helping hand wouldn't go a miss...

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  • 10 years ago

    by NyellMoonlight

    Wow, your writing amazes me every time. Great poem, with excellent choice of words, I love every line. You're so talented!
    5/5 from me

  • 10 years ago

    by Narphangu

    Really good. I like this one nearly as much as the curfew at nine one.
    Again, this would make an incredible song.
    I'm jealous.

    Xp!
    --SP

  • 10 years ago

    by HOLLYWOODxBANGBANG

    I noticed a few things in this one, first...

    "But someone told me to never look back, directed me along this winding track."

    ^^ That line is kind of long, you could make it two lines, seperating it at the comma. Same with this one:

    "I've been here before, not once but twenty times. And always one too less."

    Another thing,

    "Where neurones, well they're only neurones"

    ^^ "neurones" should be "neurons".

    Other than that, the imagery was once again wonderful, it kind of skipped around a bit but I read it a few times and it made more sense every time lol.

    5.5
    :]
    <3

  • 10 years ago

    by Tracy D Rollings

    WOW this was an awesome poem, very unique and well worded, great job, loved it, keep up the good work, your friend Tracy dean 5/5