Love is a burden (Sonnetic)

by Fsams   Jul 7, 2007


Never love and live in a garden
For the so-called love is a burden

At the beginning its only fragrance
But later an awful ambiance

The thorns will slowly kill you
With pain you cant go through

Stay safe from the so-called love
Stay safe from the burden above

And if you do it without condom
You will lose all your freedom

And the very simple mistake
Adds burden you cant take

Life without kids, is so easy
When your life is, really busy

Never love and live in a garden
If you cant carry the burden

Written by Fsams
07/07/2007
Saturday 07:07:07

Important: The seven sonnetic stanzas belong to a totally different group of lovers and the last stanza belongs to the real lovers who know that love can be a burden sometimes and have the capability to carry the burden and persevere.

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  • 9 years ago

    by DeepLife

    I understand what you mean,
    Love can be a burden...
    It's interesting how you compared it with a garden.

    I say you really wrote a Great poem, and also made sure you proved your point ;)
    5/5

  • 9 years ago

    by A l y s s a

    Haha! This was a great poem. Great use of words and it has a great affect. Nice work :)

    Ally. x

  • 9 years ago

    by Robert

    I really don't agree with the message, but other then that I can't see anything wrong with the poem it was heart felt followed through with a clear message and kept the reader I wanting to read on so I gave it a 5. Plot121

  • 10 years ago

    by Shinobi

    A really well structured and well rhymed poem. Never seemed anything like it, don't have any bad comments. Just keep it up :) 5/5

  • 10 years ago

    by Independence Forever

    I liked the rhyming, pacing, and format. i also liked how you fit certain words in there such as ambience and dare i say condom. good work, well written

    your servant:
    atticus